Proof reading

As you can see their a number of problems with this piece of text. Punctuation is poor and capital letters and missing from the text. Basic literacy is a must in terms of presentations due to portraying yourself in a professional manor. The way in which the message is expressed is poor
 and could be presented in a much better way for the audience to read the message.

This is my paragraph after i proof read it. As you can see the punctuality problem is solved followed by capital letter are used in appropriate places to show that i have a level of literacy. I read through it to check for any misspellings. Also i increased the level of grammar by rewording some phrases to make the sentences flow more.  The expression of the content is much more professional now once i looked for errors through proof reading.

Linguistic register

Linguistic register is the language that you use when writing about a topic. The main point is to make your writing seem like you have a high level of grammar and to make your writing seem professional. Linguistic register is key when expressing a short film proposal because you want people to be interested and take your film seriously but how can they do that if the way your writing in unprofessional. 

This short paragraph demonstrates poor linguistic register.

 I believe that people should be treated fairly and should treat people how they would like to be treated and Abuse towards women is really well known and is especially known for the bad things behind it. why would they feel the need to abuse men and it happens to men more than people think. men getting abused is weird and there's something about their pride that makes them not tell anyone about it.

This paragraph is inappropriate due to the sentence structure being poor. The word "and" is overused to join points together rather than using a variety of punctuation. Also the vocabulary is poor such as words like "weird" and "bad". It demonstrates a very low level of writing which in this case would be unprofessional. 

This paragraph demonstrates good linguistic register. 

In life I believe that people should be treated fairly and should treat people how they would like to be treated themselves. Abuse towards women is so well known and is especially known for the trauma behind it, so why would they feel the need to abuse men? It turns out that men are abused more than people think. When males receive abuse, there's something about their pride that causes them to keep the situation hidden. 

This paragraph demonstrates good linguistic register due to the sentence structure being good and the punctuation is used in the appropriate places. Also the the grammar of the paragraph is at a high level which leads to the paragraph expressing the message in the most professional way. For example, "abuse men?" is a good example of punctuation in right place. In addition examples of good grammar would be "keep the situation is hidden".

Reading techniques

Reading techniques are key to understanding what you are actually reading when looking at a text. the four main types of techniques are:

• skimming
• scanning
• extensive 
• intensive 

These techniques when trying to understand a text are vital due to them giving you the ability to grab a better picture of the text. skimming is used ideally for note taking, you will quickly skim over the text picking out relevant information out in your mind that you think is important. this could benefit a reader due to not filling his mind up with words that aren't necessarily relevant and also reading a large text often leads to boredom. 

Scanning is prefect for when you have a set topic for what you need to pick out from the text, skim over the text picking out key information which is only relevant to the set topic that you have chosen. this is extremely helpful due to grabbing the information that you need from a text quickly and not getting sidetracked with other topics. 

Extensive and intensive are mainly due to 'how' you read the text. having the right mind set is key when reading a text due to if your not really bothered about it then information will not soak in the mind. intensive is reading with high concentration followed by no distractions where as extensive is just having a general mind set of enjoying reading it, you tend to remember things you like so it adds on for a better study when reading through text. 

scanning is a great way to help the reader extract key information from the passage and gives a better understanding of the general idea of the text. 3 print texts insert below.

Image relevancy

a good presentation image is more than just a good photograph or illustration due to it needing to match your message. Like telling a good joke, an effective image needs good setup and good delivery. positioning of the image can show relevance to your topic due to it having the ability to express the message verbally or facially.


does your approach support rich imagery?

analogies or metaphors can cause your audience to remember the message more than they would if you gave them basic text. they can be seen as more memorable visuals.
try one idea or key point per slide. whilst you present the idea within the slide your images must link to the message your trying to explain. sometimes use several images to build up to the main message. such as here are how things are, here as what things could be.

image uniqueness 

• does your image stand out?
• is it going to capture the attention of the audience? 

the subject of the photo can be unique followed by the composition of it. uniqueness is what will grab the audiences attention due to them not seeing it before. the subject of the photo is the main point of the image. always avoid used images due to them being so common that audiences have seen them before and become bored when seeing them.

unexpected application is way to draw the audiences attention.
using a photo that has playful images which surprises the audience will grab their attention.

realistic vs fake. 

keep your images real not what you think would be the perfect picture of the situation. also exaggeration can be good however as long as it is not too out of proportion. focus on people. audiences respond more to images with peoples facial expressions due to it being something they do.
put several images together to portray a story, sometimes with no text at all, some images speak louder than words. finally evoke an emotion, use images that brand heart warming emotion due to the audience liking the feeling of being inspired.


humor 

humor is a good way to engage the audience, especially with funny images that will make them like the presentation due to finding it funny.

composition

• Asymmetry can be interesting when making photos. most asymmetry photos come with the rule of  thirds. images together that link and also are position them next to each other will draw the audiences eye from one image to the other. empty space!! it leaves a great part of your image to have clear text.

• Point of view can make a picture more appealing than what it actually is, enhancing its appearance.

• Perspective can make an image have a deeper meaning which will inspire the audience.

• Crop images to make the image consist of exactly what you want to be in the image.

• Background subjects can be engaging for the audience, putting the message on a white background can give an instant message for your audience that they will understand.

• Focus or depth of field: focus on something within the image which stands out from the rest of the things within the image. focusing picks them out and blurs the background.

• Framing, a photographer can use the frame to add feel of depth which makes the image more interesting and unique. when we look past something, we are naturally drawn to what is past it.

• Action or motion: a photo that captures movement but can still understand that it is moving clearly.

• Repetition can emphasize a key point and colorful images can catch the eye of your audience.

Choosing graphics for your presentation

"Good" can be extremely subjective or relative.

Have the quality basics covered:

• higher resolution 
• adequate size, professional-looking 
• not distorted (stretched)

Two factors define whether a photo or picture is a good enough presentation image:

• image relevancy - does it support/ reinforce the key point or message of your slide
• image uniqueness - does the image stand out and get noticed  by your audience

Poor quality, overused/ generic images that are not relevant to your message end up being distractions. they don't complement your message, they just get in the way. 

If your images are unique but not relevant or vice versa, they become decorations- ineffective accents to your message

 The index gives a specific page number on the specific topic you are looking for. Looking for specific types of abuse on the contents wouldn't be as helpful as the index due to it being to general. In this case i was looking for physical abuse and the index told me it was on page 5 so i went to page 5 and got what i was looking for.

Men were victims of just over a quarter of incidents of domestic violence in 2010, according to the British Crime Survey. Find out about the signs of domestic violence, and where to get support if it’s happening to you.

Anybody can be affected by domestic abuse, and anyone can be an abuser. It doesn't just happen to women – men can be victims too, whether their partner is a man or a woman. 

If it's happening to you, it's important to tell someone and to remember that you're not alone.

Ippo Panteloudakis is helpline manager for the Men's Advice Line, which offers help over the phone or via email. "We spoke to 800 male victims of domestic abuse in 2010," he says. "More men are coming forward than a few years ago, and the services to support them are improving very quickly."

The Men's Advice Line can refer men to local places that can help, such as health services and voluntary organisations.

summary

Men get abused more than people think, over a quarter of situations dealing with domestic violence involved men getting either mentally or physically abused. people don't realize that anyone can abuse and anyone can be abused. Men didn't used to speak up about their situation of abuse, however a few years ago more men spoke up. Their is a men's advice help line that offers guidance to help them get through the situation. 

Books on abuse towards men

PW.C, 2009, abused men: the hidden side of domestic violence, 2nd edition, praeger publishers - 2009


I searched on Google "domestic violence towards men and it gave me a book which significantly shows that abuse towards men is not seen as an issue mainly because people do not know that it occurs.

This is a screen shot from a part of the book, it portrays the fear of men standing up to the situation due to them feeling like a "wimp" if they get abused by a woman. Further more, the abuse towards men does not necessarily have to be physical abuse, they can be abused mentally.

Journal for abuse towards males

This journal backs up the point of males needing to stand up for domestic violence that takes place. the journal also backs up that male abuse is not taken as seriously as it should it be, stereo typically its always been known for males to be the one who abuse women however that is not the case.

Short film

You should be able to create a quality short for $1000 no problem. Focus not on the camera or lenses or lights as much though as the storytelling, acting, planning, pre-production and ideas. That will always be your most important thing.

- copy and pasted from -  http://www.filmmakerforum.org/production/1518-how-much-does-it-cost-to-shoot-a-short-film.html


USP 

my USP will be that the male in this situation is the one who is getting abused, abuse towards men isn't considered important as it should be. The fact that my short film will contain the life of a male who is abused stands out from others. 

 
 
legal and ethical issues

the ethical issue with the short film would be that women shouldn't abuse men because they can, the abuse towards women from men is already heavily frowned upon so they should not feel the need to abuse men, the abuse towards men occurs more than anyone would believe. it happens every 1 in 6 men, and that's just the UK. 

'Abuse towards men' gives a vast amount of answers for the search, the magazine that came up is extremely relevant for the topic of abuse towards men, the magazine has views from men that have been abused. This is helpful due to in my short film, I could put together a scenario that relates to real life, as a result this the short film would be more engaging to watch due to the audience being able to relate. Also it can help me identify what has been done and what has not been done, this will help create a successful USP (unique selling point) which will help my short film be more engaging. 

Skimming and Scanning are two specific speed-reading techniques, which enable you to cover a vast amount of material very rapidly. These techniques are similar in process but different in purpose. Quickly "looking over" an article is neither skimming nor scanning.

http://www.bbc.co.uk/skillswise/factsheet/en05skim-e3-f-skimming-and-scanning


This page was copy and pasted.

This is to demonstrate summarising

summarising

If you get a large extract of information not all of it may be relevant to what your looking for. Summarising will give you the information that you need and will give you the understanding of the text.

First you will need to skim read over the whole of the text to get a general Idea of what its about, this is so you get a general understanding of the whole extract.

Then scan the extract for key information that is relevant to what your going to summarise.

Once you have the key information picked out, you will need to paraphrase your summary (in your own words). link the key information together so it forms a few sentences, the sentences will be the key information that one would need to know from the extract. after that, you will have a summary for the extract however all of the summary will be relevant to you.

extract

Jeremy Corbyn was on Tuesday branded “disloyal” for refusing to sing the national anthem on a day of chaos which saw one of his shadow cabinet ministers threaten to resign over the European Union.

The new Labor leader faced heavy criticism for standing in silence while God Save the Queen was played during a Battle of Britain remembrance ceremony at St Paul’s Cathedral attended by the Prime Minister, Defence Secretary and scores of military leaders.

• PMQs: Jeremy Corbyn vs David Cameron: live

Former military commanders as well as Labour and Tory MPs said he was “dishonourable” for refusing to sing the national anthem.

Mr Corbyn later insisted that he “stood in respectful silence” during the remembrance ceremony.

In contrast to other leaders and dignitaries at the event, Mr Corbyn wore a mismatched suit and the top button on his shirt appeared to be undone.

• MPs approve £4.4bn of tax credit cuts as Jeremy Corbyn says Tories are 'poverty deniers' and we will fight them

And less than 48 hours after the formation of the shadow cabinet, Lord Falconer, who served under Tony Blair, on Tuesday exposed the divisions in the new Labour leadership as he warned that he will step down if Mr Corbyn campaigns to leave the European Union.

In a further blow to Mr Corbyn, it emerged that up to 100 Labour MPs are preparing to defy him by preparing to publicly campaign for Britain to stay in the EU “with or without” the new leader’s support. 

Mr Corbyn on Tuesday travelled to the TUC conference in Brighton where he delivered a rambling speech which called for people to be given unlimited benefits.

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general election and compared the Government to the fascist leadership of General Franco in Spain.

In another sign of the disarray in Labour, Mr Corbyn forgot to deliver a number of lines in his speech that had been pre-briefed ahead of his appearance at the conference.

• Jeremy Corbyn’s biggest problem with women? We see right through him

It comes as Mr Corbyn prepares to face David Cameron at Prime Minister’s Questions for the first time. 

The new Labour leader has “crowd sourced” his questions to Mr Cameron by inviting members of public to submit their ideas of the Labour website.

Labour said that more than 30,000 people have submitted questions in recent days.

Mr Corbyn was on Monday evening forced to issue a statement after hours of criticism over his decision not to sing the national anthem.

Asked if Mr Cameron was surprised Mr Corbyn had not sung the anthem, the Prime Minister's official spokeswoman said: "The importance the Prime Minister attaches to the National Anthem is visible - every time he's at one of these services or a state or national event, he is very proud and willing to join with others in singing the National Anthem."

Admiral Lord West of Spithead, a Labour peer and former security minister, said: “Singing the national anthem is a sign of loyalty to the United Kingdom and British people. I cannot believe that the people of our great nation could contemplate a Prime Minister who lacks that loyalty.”

Sir Nicholas Soames, a Tory MP and the grandson of Winston Churchill, said not singing the anthem was "very rude and very disrespectful" to the Queen and "the Battle of Britain pilots who gave their all".

key points

• Jeremy Corbyn was on Tuesday branded “disloyal” for refusing to sing the national anthem on a day of chaos
• The new Labour leader faced heavy criticism for standing in silence whilst god save the queen was playing
• Mr Corbyn later insisted that he “stood in respectful silence”
• on Tuesday exposed the divisions in the new Labour leadership as he warned that he will step down if Mr Corbyn campaigns to leave the European Union.
• delivered a rambling speech which called for people to be given unlimited benefits
• Mr Corbyn was on Monday evening forced to issue a statement after hours of criticism over his decision not to sing the national anthem.
• every time he's at one of these services or a state or national event, he is very proud and willing to join with others in singing the National Anthem."
•  said not singing the anthem was "very rude and very disrespectful" to the Queen and "the Battle of Britain pilots who gave their all".

 

 

 summary of Jeremy Corbyn

On Tuesday Jeremy Corbyn was called disloyal for refusing to sing the nation anthem on a day where the people needed to hear it most. for his actions, he faced heavy criticism for being silent whilst the national anthem was playing. Former military commanders called him dishonourable for refusing to sing, however he insisted that he meant no disrespect he simply just stood in respectful silence. 48 hours after the incident, lord falconer stated that he will step down if Mr Corbyn campaigns to leave the European union. Also on the same day Mr Corbyn gave a rambling speech that consisted of giving people unlimited benefits.